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You recently bought a household appliance from a local store, but it is not working properly. Describe the problem with the appliance explain what happened after discovered the problem say what you would like the store to do.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with a refrigerator I purchased from your store on August 15th.
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 it was delivered in good condition, the appliance has not been properly functioning since the next week of use. The primary issue is that the cooling system fails to maintain a consistent temperature.
As a result
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, food items stored inside are spoiling, which defeats the purpose of owning the refrigerator. I checked the power supply and
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 followed the troubleshooting steps mentioned in the manual
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, the problem still persists. Given these circumstances, I kindly request that to arrange for a technician to inspect the appliance at your earliest convenience, as it comes under the warranty policy. If the defect can not be resolved , I would appreciate either a replacement with a new unit or a full refund. I look forward to your prompt response. Your faithfully, Rushabh Patel

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Put the most clear idea first. Start with what you want from the shop and the fault at once.
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Give exact dates, model name, and order number to support your claim.
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Break long sentences into short ones. Use 2 or 3 short lines for each idea.
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The letter states the fault and shows the steps you took.
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It asks for a repair, a replacement, or a refund under the warranty.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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