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Every country in the world has its own road rules but numerous drivers don’t obey them why this happening what can be done to solve this issue.

There is no denying the fact that there is an ongoing debate with compelling reasons about
most
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why most
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 countries'
drivers
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 do not obey the
rules
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 of the
roads
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road
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.
This
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 essay will discuss what are the reasons for
this
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 phenomenon and the possible solutions.
To begin
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drivers
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 to disobey the
rules
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 of the
roads
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.
Firstly
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, the vast majority of individuals are ignorant about the
laws
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 of the railroads.
In other words
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, most
drivers
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 are old people, so they most likely do not pay any attention to the current
rules
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 related to the streets.
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, teenagers are careless when it comes to
rules
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.
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, a recent article published in Scientific American revealed that 50% of young people are reckless and careless about the
rules
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 and
laws
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and that
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,
has
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 resulted in some potential issues on roads
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, such
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 as traffic jams, speed limits, and accidents. In terms of potential solutions, we can start by creating awareness among individuals about the
laws
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 and
rules
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 related to railroads. It is
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 possible to say that
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 using television and social media is an effective method to concentrate on improving people's driving behaviours.
Moreover
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, our government should pass strict
laws
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 about driving.
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, if the governments put a fine on those who disobey the
rules
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such
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, such
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 as speed limits,
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 might alleviate the issue
in
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on
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streets
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the streets
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 that we are facing nowadays. To encapsulate the essence of everything said above, there are many causes for
drivers
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 who do not follow the
rules
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like
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, like
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 speeding. It is
also
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 true that we can overcome
this
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 problem with simple measures
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 as spreading awareness about the
rules
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 and putting fines on reckless
drivers
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.

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task response
The essay tries to answer the question but some ideas are not clear. State a clear position and support it in all parts.
task response
Avoid general statements like 'old people' and 'teens' as rules. Use more general reasons and avoid unproved claims.
task response
Use proper words for road rules, not 'railroads'. Keep examples simple and real, and explain how they support your point.
coherence
Plan your writing. Use 4 paragraphs: introduction, two body paragraphs (causes, solutions), conclusion. Each paragraph has 4-5 simple sentences.
coherence
Link ideas with clear transitions. After you state a point, add a reason and example.
structure
There is an introduction and a conclusion that show structure.
coherence
Some transitions are used to connect ideas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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