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The table shows the percentage of government expenditure on health care in five countries in 2006 as well as the proportions of 24-30-year-olds working in medical services. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the percentage of government expenditure on health care in five countries in 2006 as well as the proportions of 24-30-year-olds working in medical services. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table provides information about administrations' spending allocations targeted on medical systems in five countries, and
also
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 illustrates their percentages of employees aged 24 to 30 in health fields.
Overall
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, Italian municipal government spent
most
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the most
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 on medical
cares
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care
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,
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 Poland invested the least funding in the same industry, with its fraction of 24-30-year-olds workforce taking the lion's share of
five
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the five
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 countries. Italy, which spent 27% of its entire expenditure on the societal health system, almost doubled the cost of
Spanish
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the Spanish
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 authority(13%). Following
by
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was the medical financial distribution of Iceland and Finland, accounting for 11% and 9%.
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 bottoming at the investment list for 5%, Poland had the largest share of medical workers aged 24 to 30, which exceeded
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half of the whole workforce. Finland, ranking
last
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, hired only a quarter of employees, which
had
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 15 percentage points less than Italian workers(40%). Among them are the percentages of Spain and Iceland, taking up 34% and 29%.

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