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Band 2

The following plans show recent archaeological finings at historic site in the year 2004 and 2014.

The given plans illustrate the changes in archaeological
finings
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findings
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 at a monumental area between 2004 and 2014.
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,
while
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 an ancient temple remained unchanged over the
decides
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decades
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, some new constructions were added in order to modernise the traditional
are
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area
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. In 2004, the heritage spot was really simple,
due to
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 the fact that
,
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 there were almost two
building
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buildings
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 and some trees.
Moreover
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, the mountains
was
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were
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looked
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clearly
behind
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visible behind
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of
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an ancient
houses
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house
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. Nowadays, there is
a
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no doubt that
,
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 some changes have enhanced the surroundings.
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, a traditional stadium was built to
organizie compitition
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organise competitions
such
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 as football, running and other types of sports
which
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, which
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 resulted in the cutting down of some trees.
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, the number of heritage buildings increased, and an ancient toilet was planned
nerby
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nearby
 them during the development. The most significant change among these
development
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developments
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 was the construction of a
hictoric
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historic
 palace. But
,
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 the mountains disappeared in the
last
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 map.

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improvement
Plan the writing. Start with a short intro, then two clear parts for 2004 and 2014, and finish with a simple end.
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Use words that link ideas, like 'and', 'but', 'also', 'for example'. Keep the time and place clear.
task response
The idea to show change over time is clear.
coherence
Some examples are given to show changes in the area.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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