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The charts below show the percentages of five kinds of book sold by a bookseller between 1972 and 2012. Summarise the information by selectingg and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart illustrates changes over time in different categories.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
percentages
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 of
five
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kinds
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 of
books
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 sold by a
bookseller
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 in 1972 increased noticeably,
while
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 the
books
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 sold by a
bookseller
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 in 2012 have declined. Apart from these two, most other categories either remained stable or showed only minor variations. At the beginning of the
period
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, the
percentages
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 of
five
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kinds
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 of
books
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 sold by a
bookseller
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 in 1972 accounted for the largest part and continued to rise steadily throughout the years. It reached a clear peak by the end of the
period
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, showing its growing importance compared to the other categories.
This
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 upward trend highlights the strong preference for the
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 of
five
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kinds
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 of
books
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 sold by a
bookseller
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 in 1972, over time.
By contrast
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, the book sold by a
bookseller
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 in 2012 started at a relatively high level but
then
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 fell gradually. By the end of the
period
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, it represented only a small proportion compared to its initial value. Despite
this
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 downward movement, the book sold by a
bookseller
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 in 2012
,
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 still played a role in the
overall
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 distribution.
Finally
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,
while
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 the
percentages
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 of
five
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kinds
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 of
books
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 sold by a
bookseller
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 in 1972 rose and the
books
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 sold by a
bookseller
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 in 2012 have declined, the general pattern indicates significant changes in people’s choices and behaviour across the
period
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentages, five, kinds, books, bookseller, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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