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Some people think teenagers have conflicts with their parents as a part of their growth.Whilst others thing it has negative which could be avoided. Discuss both of your views .

The relationship between
parents
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 and
teenagers
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 is often a complex and sensitive subject matter where
conflicts
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 are associated
daily
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with daily
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 life. Some
beleive
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believe
 that disputes between
parents
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 and
teenagers
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 are part of the growth
cycle
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while
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 others
belive
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believe
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 that
conflicts
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 are always disadvantageous. In below paragraphs, both these views are thoroughly discussed. Disputes between
teenagers
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 with their
parents
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 can be an opportunity for
teenager
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teenagers
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 to widen
the
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their
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 perspective of the world
through
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on
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trial-and-error
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a trial-and-error
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 basis.
Parents
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 should allow them to
self explore
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self-explore
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, understand and try solutions of their own in order to experience different outcomes. Sometimes, through failure, young individuals tend to understand the mistakes and would lean to listen to their
parents
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 in later stages through developing the social relationship and thinking pattern.
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 reason, disputes can be
a
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 opportunity to grow through
radical
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a radical
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 learning process.
On the other hand
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,
conflicts
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 between
teenagers
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 and
parents
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 can go to extreme ends where resolving is merely difficult. As an example,
ones
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parents
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 might not prefer the child to be a
foodball
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football
 player but rather want to become a high-school graduate.
This
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 is
very
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 common disagreement between most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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teenagers
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 and their
parents
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, making
impossible
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it impossible
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 to reach
for
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apply
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a solution. These
kind
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kinds
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 of
conflicts
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 could spoil the parent-child relationship and mostly affect the child's social life
due to
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 the lack of conflict resolution knowledge.
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 conclusion, even though
conflicts
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 between
parents
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 and
teenagers
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 can be considered as part of the growth in some situations, they end up causing negative effects
at
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apply
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most of the time.

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task
Make your view clear. State a main idea and stick to it in the end. Show both sides with full, real ideas.
coherence
In each paragraph, give one main idea and start with a clear topic sentence. Use order in your writing.
language
Use simple, common words and check spelling so readers understand you well.
task response
The essay tries to talk about both sides.
coherence
There are places where connecting words help ideas flow.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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