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Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access too much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some
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 argue that the
internet
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people
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 with a lot of significant
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while
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 others believe that reach out in much
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 can cause trouble. In my opinion, I agree that using too much online instruction will lead to
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. In
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Firstly
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, the
internet
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 has become in trend around the world, and everyone can access it in an easy way. In fact, many
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 use the
internet
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 for their work, study, research , etc. , depending on what
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 they need to know.
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 the University of Sydney, there are reports that many students are
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information
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 on social online for their thesis or assessments. From
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 can be shown that the
internet
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 can help them learn much more about their study.
On the other hand
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, it has many reasons why the
internet
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information
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 can lead to problems.
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answers on one topic.
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, the
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 about
people
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 who often get a headache. Some
websites
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provide
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 that
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 happens from stress, some give advice about high blood pressure.
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, some suggestions
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are to
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 take more vitamins to reduce symptoms.
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 if
people
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 believe without knowledge. In my opinion, I strongly agree that using too much
information
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 from the
internet
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 can cause more problems because they have a lot of fake
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websites
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 to confuse
people
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.
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, there are a lot of real
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websites
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 to give benefits to
people
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 using them.
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, the reporters from TV programs show an increase in scammer bank
websites
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 to access users'
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 by
fake
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information
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 to scam
people
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 , and
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causes leading
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 to
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a big
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 problem for the banking economy. In conclusion, the
internet
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 gives us more
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 with benefits and negative things , but
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 I believe that reaching out to them too much can cause many issues , so we need to research them from the original website to be knowledgeable and use it carefully.

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task response
State your position clearly in the introduction and keep it throughout the essay.
coherence
Make each paragraph have one main idea, with a topic sentence and a clear link to your view.
accuracy
Explain ideas with simple facts and avoid extra or wrong claims.
development
Use examples that directly support your point and explain how they prove it.
cohesion
Use simple linking words to connect ideas, such as 'Firstly', 'However', 'In addition', 'Therefore'.
grammar
Check grammar and sentence structure to improve clarity; avoid long run-on sentences.
task response
The essay shows a clear position and takes a stance on the issue.
coherence
There are attempts to give examples to support points.
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