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Writing Samples
Band 3

Explain some of the ways in which human are damanging the environment. What can governments to do address these problems? What can individual people do?

In
the
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modern society, the
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environment protect
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environmental protection
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 problem is a topic of
discuss
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discussion
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.
While
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 people have a relationship
near
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with nature.
Therefore
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, the deterioration of environmental quality in recent decades has
heavy
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heavily
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effected
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affected
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on
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human life.
This
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 will
be demonstrated
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demonstrate
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 some of the ways in which
human
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humans
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 are destroying the
environment
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 in paragraphs. The social is increasingly developing by the innovation of human
.
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innovation.
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Hence
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, there are a host of proofs
shown
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showing
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 that the significant influences of people
to
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on
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atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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, air, and
natural
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nature
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.
Firstly
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, the consumption of
resident
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residents
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 with the goods
price
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prices
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cheap
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is
extremelly
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extremely
 enormous, when they
used
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use
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 too much
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then
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and then
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 throw
away
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it away
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, and
this
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leading
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leads
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 to too much waste
into
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in
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 the
environment
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causing
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, causing
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overload
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overloaded
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 landfills
,
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 and water pollution.
Secondly
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, the advancement of vehicles
are
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is
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also
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 a main reason because when
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this
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these
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 cars
active
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are active
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 ,
it
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they
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 will discharge
into the
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environment
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 a large amount of carbon
.
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into the environment.
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As a result
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,
this
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cause
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causes
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 air pollution
,
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 and some respiratory diseases,
espeially
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especially
 in big cities
such
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 as Ho Chi Minh
city
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City
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, Ha Noi capital.
Therefore
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, the
goverments
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governments
 need to give some solution to solve
this
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 situation
like
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: allocating more funding to green technology projects or renewable energy.
For example
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, the change from the carbon-intensive energy vehicles to
electrical
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electric
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 vehicles, which will help
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
 decrease massive exhaust emissions.
Subsequently
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, the individuals have to
awareness
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be aware
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about
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of
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 their activities, they should use eco-friendly
produce
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products
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 or recyclable
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instead
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ones instead
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 of
comsump
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consuming
 disposable
.
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ones.
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 In conclusion, people should balance
between
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the development of technology and preserve their planet.

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structure
Use a clear plan. Start with a short intro that says what you will cover. Then have para for each main idea: harm to the Earth, what the gov can do, and what people can do. End with a short finish.
grammar
Fix grammar and spell words the right way. For example, 'environment' not 'enviroment', 'extremely' not 'extremelly', 'gas' is not right here. Use simple sentence form.
lexical
Choose easy words. Do not use long or hard word. Check spell and the form of verbs.
example
Add a simple example in each idea. For instance, 'cars give off bad air in big cities like Ho Chi Minh City' to show air pollution.
coherence
Put one idea in each paragraph. Start with a topic sentence that says the main idea of that paragraph. Use link words to show how ideas go from one to the next.
strength
You try to answer all parts of the task.
strength
You use some linking words to show order.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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