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of the widely discussed issues nowadays it’s problem
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in our cities,
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examples
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my city
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roads
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,
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.
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reasons
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of that big cars like gazelle
they
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spoil
roads
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,
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Now people are beginning to
realize
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that cars many than
train
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trains
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for
railways
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. Personally, I tend to think that in future I believe that
railways
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we won’t need
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I hope on fly car, maybe scientists imagine that.
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, it is well known that, for poor people who can’t afford
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with
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airplane
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. Now plane tickets cost more
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that
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than
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the
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past. What I mean here is that if
train
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the train
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won’t be hard for
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those who
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can’t afford
plane
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a plane
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,
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of the main reasons behind
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if
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that if
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you don’t want
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money
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railways
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, you need
do
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to buy
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plane tickets
cheaper
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. But we have to repair
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for cars, because
from
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of
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wrong
roads
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, nowadays
so
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many accidents,
life
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human life
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humans
importantly
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in
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China
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China,
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there are a lot of crashes, nobody
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the
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most accidents in the world
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in China.
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, it can
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that to many we use
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for usually but
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not usually and because that
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money
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for
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railways
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wrong
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.
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to
say
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railways
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not
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do not
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often
breakdown
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if
spend for
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they are
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repair
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only once
it’s
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; it’s
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enough for 10,15 years. Take
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example crash on
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railways
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the railways
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sometimes
and
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its reason
that
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railways
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the railways
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well
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. In
conclusion
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taking everything mentioned into account in our final
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we can say that
spend
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money
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for
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on
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roads
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good
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idea than
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spending
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money
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for
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on
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railways
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, but
must
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we must
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not understate
both of
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of both
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. I hope that our country
devolves
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develops
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and
get
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gets
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better transport. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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trains
like
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are like
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past centuries, so old
,
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apply
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and not modern.
Trip
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The trip
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on
train
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the train
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not
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is not
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better

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