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The maps illustrate the modifications made to Porth Harbour from 2000 to the present day.

The maps illustrate the modifications made to Porth Harbour from 2000 to the present day.
The maps illustrate the modifications made to Porth Harbour from 2000 to the present day.
Overall
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, the
Porth
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Port
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 Harbour has undergone considerable changes during the decade. Certain facilities
like
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, like
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docks
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docks,
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 have been removed in order to accommodate more space for ships.
While
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 in
2000
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2000,
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 the private yachts had been replaced with fishing boats in
current
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the current
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 year.Another major change was the addition of the showers and toilets in the west area, so each of the fishing
boast
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boats
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 and marina yachts has its own facilities. It is
also
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 observed in the
south
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southern
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 area that cafés and shops were added next to the lifeboat.
Moreover
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, the castle had been replaced with a hotel, and the main road had been extended to reach the hotel. Notably, in the southern area
the
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 public beach is owned by the hotel.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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