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In the past, most people used to travel to their place of work. With increased use of computers, the internet and smart phones, more and more people are starting to work from home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

In recent times, the majority of individuals prefer
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work
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to work
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 from
home
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due to
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 the technical advancements,
such
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 as the internet, smartphones, and computers
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instead
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, instead
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 of commuting
the
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workplaces
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workplace
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. In
this
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 essay, I will examine the benefits and drawbacks of
this
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 trend. On the one hand, the biggest advantage of working remotely is flexibility and
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also
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it also
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 avoids
stress
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the stress
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 of commuting.
This
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 can help some workers.
For example
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, IT programmers and
grafik
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graphic
 designers create
own
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their own
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 working schedule and enjoy lunch with family.
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 freedom leads
work
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-life balance
and
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, and
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 working from
home
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 is
also
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 more comfortable.
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, people take a break whenever they need.
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, remote
work
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also
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have
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 its disadvantages, when people
work
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 from
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home
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home,
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 they might feel very lonely.
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, many people may lack
of
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apply
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sufficient discipline to complete the
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 they need to do without colleagues around. Another major negative side is distracting. Households may affect telecommuting who
was
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 working remotely. In conclusion, remote
work
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 is beneficial for
home
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 workers
that
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because
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 it gives them increased flexibility and sharing time
family
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with family
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 members and
also
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 enjoyment.
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, there are some negatives including distractions and
loneles
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loneliness
. It affects
productivity
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the productivity
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 of
work
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.

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structure
Plan in a simple way. Use three parts: how it helps, how it hurts, and a short ending. Start each part with a clear idea.
coherence
Use linking words to show the flow. Use and, but, also, for example to join ideas.
content
The text tries to talk about both good and bad sides of the change.
structure
There is an ending that repeats the idea.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommuting
  • virtual collaboration
  • work-life balance
  • productivity
  • flexibility
  • commuting
  • isolation
  • disconnect
  • coordination
  • boundaries
  • distractions
  • remote work
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