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Some people think that hosting an international sports eventsis a good for the country while some people think it's bad. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Hosting international sporting
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 as the Olympics or FIFA World Cup, often creates a debate. Some argue that
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events
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 harm the host country,
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 others believe they bring significant benefits. In
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 essay, I will discuss both views and explain why I support the idea of hosting international sports
events
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. On the one hand, hosting these
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 can have some negative consequences.
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, they often lead to pollution and environmental damage.
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, the construction of stadiums and tourist facilities usually increases air and noise pollution, and the large crowds of visitors can generate huge amounts of waste.
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, once a country becomes permanently famous for hosting
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 an event, it can face long-term challenges
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 as overcrowded tourist sites, higher costs of living, and pressure to maintain the same level of international recognition, which may not always be sustainable.
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, I strongly believe the benefits outweigh the drawbacks. Hosting international
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 allows citizens to get automatic access to world-class entertainment, as they can easily attend the matches or ceremonies without
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 abroad.
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 creates a sense of pride and unity among the people.
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, these
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 usually lead to major infrastructure development,
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 as better roads, airports, public transport, and sporting facilities. These improvements benefit the country for decades, long after the event is over.
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, the 2012 London Olympics significantly improved transportation systems in East London, which continues to serve residents today. In conclusion,
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 international sporting
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 can cause pollution and create long-term fame-related pressures, I believe the advantages, including improved infrastructure and greater access to global
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, make them a positive trend. Countries should continue to host
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events
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but
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also
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 focus on sustainable planning to reduce negative effects.

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development
You answer the task well and show both sides with your view. To gain more marks, add facts or numbers about cost, jobs, or how long the good Effects last.
organization
Link ideas with short, clear cues. Start each paragraph with a simple topic sentence and use easy link words to show addition or contrast.
example
Use one more example or two to back your point, not just the London case.
strength
Clear view of your position and the balance of view is easy to see.
strength
Good example of London 2012 as support.
strength
The essay follows a clear order: intro, two body parts, and a close.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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