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The maps below show Hunderstone town at present and a proposed plan for it

The maps below show Hunderstone town at present and a proposed plan for it
The maps give information about Hunderstone town now and its new plan
in
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for
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 the future.
Overall
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, one of the most remarkable changes in
map
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the map
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 is build-up
arearing
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area
 and gas station will slightly enlarge
and
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, and
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 the
air field
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airfield
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 will be
replace
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replaced
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 by
industrial
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an industrial
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 estate.
While
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 a
railway
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 will be smaller, an extra
roundabouts
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roundabout
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 will be constructed
in
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apply
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there.
In addition
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, some new
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road
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roads
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 will
also
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 make it easier to access different areas. There are several changes in the bottom half of the map.
While
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 the current
roundabount
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roundabout
 will still
remail
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remain
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, another one will be added on the
railway
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, linking the A2 and
Town
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the Town
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center
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centre
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.
Moreover
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, a new
road
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, named
is
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apply
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A4, will connect the A2 with
Town
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the Town
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center
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centre
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 by crossing
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railway
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the railway
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.
Finally
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, a gas station and
build-up
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a build-up
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 area around
will
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it will
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 be widened. The removal and
mordernization
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modernisation
 of some facilities will
witness
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be witnessed
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 on the left. The
Air field
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airfield
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 will be eliminated and replaced Industrial estate.
This
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 new facility will be connected to both the A2
road
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to
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and to
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railway
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 by a new
road
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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