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Many universities students live with their families, while others live away from home because their universities are in different places. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both situations?

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 is better for youth
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 they are studying: to be closer to their household or to the study place. The
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comparison
 of
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these
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 two
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situations
 will be
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described
 in
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 essay. A key factor contributing to
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living
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 with parents is
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. It is needed to pay
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additionally
 only for travel
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in contrast
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 with bills for food and rent.
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,
student
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a student
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 may become independent later
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then
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 his friends
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moreover
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moreover,
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 he may have
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fewer
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 job
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connections
 after
high
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higher
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education
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educations
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educations,
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that
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 can
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cause
 problems with
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employment
.
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, home living looks
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 it
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also
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merits
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 in staying apart. A clear example of
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 can
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 seen in
socializing
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. It is a big
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difference
 in time to get to the lesson, so it is easier to do activities with classmates after lectures.
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 it works only if
student
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students
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 have enough money,
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this
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 duration will be covered by work. In conclusion, I firmly believe that apart
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 is
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important
 part of university life.
Socializing
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, job contacts and early independence are great things to get into your
live
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. No
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matter
 if you need to work to afford it, it worce it.

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planning
Plan your essay with three clear parts: an intro that states your view, a body that gives two sides with one main idea in each paragraph, and a short conclusion.
language
Use simple, correct sentences. Fix many spelling and grammar errors to make your point easy to read.
content
Give a real example or result to show a point, like how living far from uni can save money but cut study time.
content
You try to talk about both sides of the topic.
structure
There is a start, middle, and end in the essay.
content
You name main ideas like cost and time.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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