You recently bought a new piece of technology for your home. Your friend is interested in purchasing the same item. Write a letter to your friend. •Explain what the technology is. •Describe how it is helpful to you. •Give your advice on whether your friend should buy it or not.

Dear Angela, I hope you are doing well
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I am writing to you
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letter in regards to an alarm
clock
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I recently purchased for my new home. I bought an alarm
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on Amazon about a month ago.
This
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device is very small but powerful.It is a chargeable
clock
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with
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LED
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lightening
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.
This
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machine comes with a small table which can be kept beside your bed. The alarm
clock
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is very helpful in many ways.
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,it gives an alert to wake up early every single morning.And
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has really helped my routine.The bright
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light is
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useful for reading.Even though I have a bulb in my room,I am able to save electricity by using
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clock
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rather than the main bulb as a source of light.
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,I will not recommend
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particularly
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device for you.
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is because it has a very low quality.You need to keep it on charge almost
everyday
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.
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,the sound it produces is too loud
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can affect your hearing in future.
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,the numbers are written in italics
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it difficult to read the time when it's dark in the evening. You can try and buy a different brand on Shein
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of Amazon
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not
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particularly
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device.My warmest regards to you
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sister Rosey Your friend Esther

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structure
Break long lines into short, clear sentences and put one idea in each paragraph.
language
Use simple words and short sentences to say what the item is, how it helps, and what you think your friend should do.
spelling
Fix small mistakes like missing spaces and wrong punctuation, and spell 'lighting' not 'lightening'.
content
Be clear that you give your view to your friend and give a short reason.
content
You tell what the item is and how it helps you.
content
You show a clear view at the end about not to buy it.
tone
The letter has a friendly tone.
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