In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

In recent years, the number of
people
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moving to urban cities has been increasing significantly
and
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therefore
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population in rural areas
becomes
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has become
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lower. In my opinion, I think
this
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is definitely a negative
development
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. In
this
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esaay
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essay
I will examine the reasons
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this
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phenomenon and
also
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my perspective.
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with
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the major reasons why
people
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move to the
city
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area
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are
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.
Firstly
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,
city
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areas are more essential
convinience
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convenience
for their life. As there are more
infastructures
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infrastructures
such
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as advanced public
transportations
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transportation
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, hospitals, and schools,
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thus
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apply
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many
people
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choose to live near where they have those facilities for
better
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a better
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life quality.
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, living in
urban
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an urban
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can
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area can
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experience
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provide
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more
activities
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opportunities
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where
people
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could find
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to
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receive various entertainment
places
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options
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.
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, citizens can meet up
each
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with each
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others
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other
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at a fancy restaurant before visiting
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a giantic
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giantic
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gigantic
department store
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at the end
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of the
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they may dance in a romantic jazz bar.
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, it is true that in the
cities
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cities,
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could
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workers can
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find more varieties of job
oppotunities
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opportunities
that workers can easier change their
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jobs
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if they
do
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are
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not
satisfy
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with their
recent
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current
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job. So, when
people
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have more choices, they have more freedom to decide how they live their
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.
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, leaving
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the countrysides
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countrysides
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countryside
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could lead to numerous drawbacks as well. First of all,
this
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trend could widen the gap of
properitiy
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property
more and more since the government have to prioritise
to develop
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developing
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city
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the city
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centre first
as
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due to
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the higher
number of
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population.
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,
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the governement
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governement
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government
budget would be spent only
smalle
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small
area
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.
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, the
congession
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congestion
problems in the
city
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will
be
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continue because citizens are still moving into the
area
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.
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,
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the
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cost of living in the urban
area
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would
be rose
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rise
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higher and higher since the
increasing
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increase
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of
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in
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demand in the
city
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boosts
up
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the supply.
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, even though the
accomodation
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accommodation
rental fee could be extremely costly, several
people
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have to find a place to live and have
pay
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to pay
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those
payment
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payments
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as they have to have somewhere to live. In conclusion, citizens
trend
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tend
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to move from their home town in
countryside
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the countryside
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and live closer to
urban
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the urban
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due
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areas due
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to the convenience,
more
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a more
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entertainment
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entertaining
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lifestyle and career
oppotunities
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opportunities
.
However
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, I
belive
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believe
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that
this
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trend is
negative
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a negative
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development
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because it causes many problems
either
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, either
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wider
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a wider
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gap
of
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in
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development
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, crowed, or
high
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a high
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cost of living. The
goverment
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government
should take
initiative
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an initiative
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policy
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in policy
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in order to manage the
development
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in rural areas.

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task response
Plan your essay first. Say your view in one line. Then give two clear reasons and a simple example.
coherence
Make each paragraph hold one main idea. Start with a topic sentence, and end with a short note that links to the next idea.
coherence
Use simple link words like 'also', 'but', 'however', 'for example' to connect ideas.
grammar
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task response
Clear view about the topic kept to the end.
coherence
There is a plan with intro, body, and conclusion.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • population shift
  • positive impact
  • negative impact
  • urbanization
  • job opportunities
  • access to education
  • access to healthcare
  • urban infrastructure
  • rural traditions
  • cultural heritage
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