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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choices of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

Some argue that people's clothes represent their cultures and characters. I partially agree with
this
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 view, since a person’s
fashion
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 choices—including clothing, makeup, hairstyles, and accessories—can reflect aspects of both culture and
personality
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. In recent years, technological development and changing lifestyles have transformed the
fashion
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 industry. Fast
fashion
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 has become particularly popular among younger generations, making it easier and more affordable for them to purchase new items.
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, social networking services play a pivotal role in shaping trends, as many individuals are influenced by what celebrities and influencers wear.
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, teenagers often imitate these figures and adopt similar
fashion
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 styles. When it comes to
personality
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, certain elements of
fashion
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 may provide clues.
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, the choice of brand, price,
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colour
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, or style can sometimes indicate one’s character. A person who prefers bright
colors
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colours
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 may be perceived as cheerful and open-minded.
Fashion
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,
therefore
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, can serve as a reflection of
personality
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 to some extent.
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, it is important not to rely too heavily on stereotypes. Judging people solely by their appearance risks overlooking their genuine character and deeper qualities. In conclusion,
while
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fashion
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 can indeed express cultural background and individual
personality
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, it should not be regarded as the only measure of who someone truly is. Each person is unique, and their identity goes far beyond the clothes they wear.

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task response
Be clear on your view at the start. State your position in one line.
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Give a strong reason for your view in each paragraph.
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Add more real and exact examples, not only ideas.
coherence
Use simple links to tie ideas. Use 'also', 'but', 'however' when needed.
coherence
Keep to one idea in each paragraph and end with a short, clear conclusion.
structure
Clear outline with intro, body, and conclusion.
content
Shows how fashion can reflect more than dress.
content
Uses real points like fast fashion and celebs to build view.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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