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Work today is very different from the past. Many people work from home because of technology. Some people say that this is a positive development. Others say that it is negative. Discuss how this has changed the way we work and are there too many disadvantages in relying on technology.

The world is very different today, and there are many things that have changed, including how
people
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work
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 now in many places.
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become
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has become
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 a big part of our
life
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lives
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 and
change
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has changed
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 many
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way
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ways
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people
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 do daily
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tasks
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.
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 essay will examine do I think
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 has changed the
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 we
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 and do I think there are disadvantages to relying too much on
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 I think
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 changed the
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 we
work
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 by making jobs
more quick
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quicker
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 and
simple
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.
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 used to write things on paper
but
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, but
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 now using
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computer
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a computer
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make
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makes
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 it
more
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apply
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faster. Sending
email
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an email
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take
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takes
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 just
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a second
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and
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, and
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worker
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workers
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 don’t have to go office because they can
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 online.
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, many
meeting
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meetings
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 happen by phone or laptop
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this
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save
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saves
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 time for everybody.
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 can finish more
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tasks
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 in
short
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a short
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 time because they
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 many tools like
internet
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the internet
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, video calls, and machines that do heavy jobs. Many companies
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 programs to check
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 or help
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workers
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 to do more
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 without
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problems
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.
This
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 makes working faster but
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little
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a little
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 boring sometimes because
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 don’t talk much
face to face
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face-to-face
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. I believe there are
problems
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 when
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use
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technology
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 too much. Some
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workers
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 become lazy because everything
done
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is done
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 by
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computer
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a computer
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. They forget to think and only wait for
machine
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the machine
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 to do
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job
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the job
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. If
internet
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the internet
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stop
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stops
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 or
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computer
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the computer
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broken
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breaks
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,
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 can’t finish
they
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their
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work
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and
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this
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cause
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causes
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 big
problems
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 for
company
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the company
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. Sometimes
people
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 feel
stress
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stressed
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 because they
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 all day on
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computer
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a computer
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 and they don’t move much.
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 can cause health
problems
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 like back pain or tired eyes.
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, some
people
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 lose
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their job
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job
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jobs
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 because
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machines
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 do it cheaper and faster than humans. In conclusion, the
way
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people
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 do their
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job
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jobs
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 has changed because of
technology
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, and at the same time, there are
problems
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 for
people
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 when they
use
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technology
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 too much in their workplaces.

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Plan your writing. Start with a clear idea about one main point in each paragraph and keep to it.
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content
The essay looks at both sides of the topic.
structure
There is a basic layout: intro, two body parts, and a conclusion.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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