In some poorer areas of large cities people are too afraid to leave their houses at night time due to a fear of crime. What are the causes of crime in those areas and what can be done to tackle those problems?

The poorer

areas

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in the big cities are very

dangures

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dangerous

because it is a home to

people

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who have no money

nor

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jobs , which are the two major motives that

made

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make

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people

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comit

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commit

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apply

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crimes

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,and

as a

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result

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result,

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people

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who

lived

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live

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there

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ofcours

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of course,

will be afraid and feel unsafe. In my opinion ,

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think the main reasons behind the high level of

crimes

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this

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these

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areas

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are:

firstly

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, the lack of jobs

which

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led to no

sorce

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source

of income. And

secondly

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, most

resedents

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residents

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this

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these

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poorer

areas

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have not

get

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received

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education , which

also

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led to having no

carrer

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career

and

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apply

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crimnal

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criminal

behaviors

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towards

people

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people

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with

low

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a low

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level of education and money

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, ofcours

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ofcours

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of course,

will

sufer

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suffer

from being homeless

and

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somtimes

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sometimes

they may

even

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could

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be able

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not pay for

they

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food

nor

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the

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health care

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this

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stiuation

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situation

put

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puts

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this

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people

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under a huge

strees

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stress

, and

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ofcurse they will steal and even do

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whic

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which

is kill

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can lead to killing

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or any

crimes

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think we can

decreas

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decrease

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this

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these

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levels of

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crimes

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crime

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in poorer

areas

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by several things. First of all,the government should

buld

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build

a charity

houses

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for those who have no house ,

as well as

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they should have a health care for free.

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find

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finding

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apply

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small jobs for them will be

helping

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helpful

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for sure.

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, in

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this

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spesific

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specific

areas

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the

polise forses

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police forces

must be in

evry

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every

street.

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up it all

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it all up

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this

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these

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areas

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faced a high

levels

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level

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crimes

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because poor

people

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sufer

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suffer

from

the

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lacks

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lack

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of money

and

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, and

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they would do

any thing

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anything

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even

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, even

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crime

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crims

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crims,

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to pay

ther

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their

needs, so if the governments help them by giving them houses and

proper

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a proper

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level of living,

ofcourse

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of course

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this

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, this

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will change

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this

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these

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areas

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and make it more safty.

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Sep 7, 2025

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Fix big spelling and grammar. Words like 'dangers', 'crime', 'area' need care.

structure

Make short, clear sentences. Start each paragraph with a main idea and link to the next idea.

content

Give one or two clear examples to show your point.

conclusion

End with a short rest of the main idea so the paragraph feels closed.

content

The writer tries to cover both causes and fixes.

structure

There is a view and a plan to help.

coherence

Some linking words connect ideas.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

297 words

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