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The internet has become profoundly efficient and popular that people choose it as a platform to learn. Some believe that it would eventually replace the need for books. Do you agree or disagree?

It has been observed that
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internet
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the internet
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 is the main source of information worldwide these days.
Although
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,
internet
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has
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is
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first
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the first
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 choice for most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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individuals
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 globally to obtain reliable information.
While
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 some
individuals
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 think that hardcover would be
supplant
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supplanted
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 by
this
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 platform. I strongly agree with
this
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 statement. My inclination will be explained in the following paragraphs with relevant examples and justifications. The foremost reason for my position is that it is
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cost affective
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cost-effective
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. As
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internet
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the internet
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 is inexpensive
compare
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compared
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 to
hardcover
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a hardcover
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.
For instance
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, if
individuals
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will
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apply
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bought the
book
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book,
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 it would
cost
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approx
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approximately
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 20 bucks for
normal
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a normal
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books
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book
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. Meanwhile, using
google
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Google
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 will
cost
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 nothing for that.
Additionaly
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Additionally
, you have
plethora
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a plethora
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 of
option
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options
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 to explore
ebooks
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as
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, as
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 on
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internet
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the internet
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most
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, most
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 of the
books
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 are free.
For example
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, it is not pocket-friendly to
bought
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buy
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 new
books
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 again and again
but
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, but
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 on
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internet
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the internet
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 you can get
many
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as many
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books
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 as
they
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you
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 want.
Furthermore
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, another significant reason to support my position is that
ebooks
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 are handy. For paper
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books
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books,
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 you need a specific space to take with you when you travel
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while
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, while
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ebooks
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 are easy to access from anywhere. To
illustarte
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illustrate
, research in
2025
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a 2025
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bbc
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BBC
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 article published that prices for
books
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 are down rapidly as
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the ebooks
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ebooks
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ebook
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 trend goes upward. Not only
it
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does it
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saves
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save
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 space and money
but
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, but
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also
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 easy to carry with you in your device
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such
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, such
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 as
mobile
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a mobile
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, laptop
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or, laptop
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.
In contrast
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, it cannot be ignored that some
individuals
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 think that there are still old-school
peoples
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people
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 are there who want to read hardcover rather than on
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internet
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the internet
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. To support
this
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view
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view,
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 people think that using
elctronic
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electronic
devises
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devices
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 like
laptop
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laptops
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,tablet phones
are
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is
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 more harmful for health
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purposes
purspective
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purspective,
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 as eyes could be damaged or get bad using
lot
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a lot
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 of screen time
as
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, as
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 for reading
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a book
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book
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book,
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 it
willl
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will
cost
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alot
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a lot
 of time
for
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apply
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that
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apply
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.
To sum up
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all
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apply
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, we cannot ignore the effects on
eyes
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the eyes
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 because of screen time
but
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, but
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 with proper care and using
eye
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eyeglasses
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glasses
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glasses,
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 it
could
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can
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 be resolved.
As using
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Using
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internet
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the internet
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 to read
books
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 is
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cost effective
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cost-effective
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 for
individuals
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with
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, with
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 easy to carry
comapre
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compared
 to
books
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.

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task
Say your view at the start and keep to it.
structure
Plan the writing: one intro, two or three ideas in body, a short end.
language
Use easy words and fix big errors in spelling and form.
content
Give clear examples that fit the points you make.
cohesion
Link parts with easy words like and, but, also to show how ideas go.
content
Clear view is seen.
content
Cost and space ideas are used as examples.
structure
There is a plan to compare internet with books.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • profoundly
  • efficient
  • platform
  • replace
  • online courses
  • resources
  • current
  • dynamic
  • engaging
  • diverse
  • accessible
  • multimedia
  • information retention
  • convenience
  • flexible
  • personalized
  • permanence
  • distractions
  • connection
  • digital reading fatigue
  • screen time
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