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It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future. To what extent do you agree ir disagree with this statement?

In recent years, when rules change and
be
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it is
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easeir
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easier
 to
saved
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save
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money
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 . In my opinion , people have many ways to live
high-quality
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a high-quality
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 life ,
for example
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 , many influencers by sharing
some
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apply
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videos
on
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apply
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online they get
money
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 , and
most
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70%
 of 70% influencers open many brands
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such
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, such
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 as makeup , clothes, or
restaurant
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restaurants
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.
but
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But
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also
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also,
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 it is
smart
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a smart
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 step to
making
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make
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new
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a new
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 lifestyle for you and your family members.
Additionally
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, you can save
money
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 from your work or
buying
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by buying
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 some things like books, drawings, or clothes.
To conclude
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 , I believe
the
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apply
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life
become
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becomes
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 easier
to
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for
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 young people
especially
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, especially
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 to make
money
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 and be rich.

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task response
Focus on one clear view. Start with a sentence that says if you agree or not. Then give two simple reasons and one small example.
task response
Use short, plain sentences. Do not drift to many ideas. Stay to the question about saving money for the future.
coherence
Put the essay in four easy parts: intro, 2 body para, and a short conclusion. Each idea should be in its own paragraph.
coherence
Use simple linking words to connect ideas: First, Also, But, So, Because.
content
The topic of saving money is used, not fully wrong.
content
There are some clear ideas about money from online work and routine spending.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • important
  • save
  • money
  • future
  • agree
  • disagree
  • young people
  • responsible
  • manage
  • finances
  • unexpected
  • opportunities
  • college
  • business
  • habits
  • lifetime
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