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Band 4.5

Some people think having a university degree is the best way to secure a good job. However, others believe skills and experience are more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Some
people
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 suggest that in order to obtain a good occupation, getting a diploma or
degree
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 from
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university
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a university
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 offers the best approach. Others argue that practical abilities and
experiences
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 are more vital than
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degree
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a degree
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. In my view, I suppose that
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degree
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a degree
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 can widely extend various choices of jobs, we won't be limited because of the
education
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educational
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 performance. On the one hand, nowadays , graduating from
university
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 is a basic standard of hiring conditions. Professors in
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university provide the
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the university provide
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 precise and
relative
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relevant
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 knowledge in the field we learn. During the schemes, we are not only learning how to cooperate with classmates, but can
also
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 discuss
the
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a
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 variety
topics
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of topics
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 in different concepts. Most of all, students are allowed to make mistakes
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then
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and then
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 correct them.
Therefore
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, students learn the other side
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by
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 correcting the mistakes. The potential employees who have
strong
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a strong
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education
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educational
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 background and ability are always fascinating to companies, perhaps they can have
much
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many
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 more
variety
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varied
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chances
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opportunities
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.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 suggest that
experiences
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,
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apply
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 and practical skills are useful.
However
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, everyone needs time to
calculate
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accumulate
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 more and more
experiences
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and
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, and
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 no one can guarantee
that
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apply
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how long
that
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apply
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people
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 require
for
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apply
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.
In addition
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, after entering the workforce,
people
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 are asked
for doing
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to do
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 everything
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correctly
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 and
giving
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give
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 the best performance. There are not many companies
can tolerate that
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that can tolerate
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 employees
gain
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gaining
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the
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apply
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experiences
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experience
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 through making mistakes and
modifying
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correcting
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 them. In conclusion, in my opinion, I agree that the best way to gain a great job is
having
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to have
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 a
university
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degree
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.
Diploma
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A diploma
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 is a fair and common approach to
estimated
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estimating
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 every potential employee's ability.

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structure
Make your main view clear in the opening and restate it in the end. Give 2 strong examples to back each side.
language
Use short, plain words. Check grammar and fix awkward word use.
cohesion
Link ideas with small words like 'and', 'but', 'also', 'for example' to make a smooth flow.
content
You answer the task and give your view on both sides.
organization
There is a basic plan with an intro, body, and conclusion.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • competitive advantage
  • in-depth knowledge
  • theoretical understanding
  • networking opportunities
  • prerequisite
  • professions
  • practical, hands-on knowledge
  • perform tasks efficiently and effectively
  • actual ability
  • deliver results
  • problem-solving
  • communication
  • teamwork
  • real-world settings
  • blend of both education and practical experience
  • theoretical concepts
  • ideal scenario
  • bolstered by practical application
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