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Band 4.5

some people think that private-sector education is better than public-sector, do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays
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a lot of people prefer to send their children
in
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to
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 a private
school
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instead
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 of a public
one
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. To be
honest
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 I have always attended a private
school
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so
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, so
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 of course I agree with the
fact
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 that a private
school
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 has more advantages
instead
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 of a public
one
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,
for
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example
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 it is more
organized
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organised
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or
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, or
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 if you need
help
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help,
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 everybody will give you a hand to solve every kind of problem. A couple of years
ago
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ago,
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 people used to think that private
schools
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 were easier
, in
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fact
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fact,
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 the common thought was as you
pay
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you
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, you
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are
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were
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authomtically
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automatically
 admitted to the next year
, the
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 truth is that it depends
in
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fact
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fact,
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 we have to distinguish between easy
schools
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 and serious
ones
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ones,
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 in which
is
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it is
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 not important if you pay or not
but
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, but
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 if you deserve what you achieve. At
this
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point
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 we have to specify that we can not say that private
schools
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 are better than public ones
in
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fact
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, at least in Milano,
is
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it is
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 full of
excellents
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excellent
 public
schools
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,
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.
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lets
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Let's
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 think
to
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berchet
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or
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, or
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to
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apply
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volta
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 or
parini
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 or
carducci
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Carducci
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,
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 maybe those are even better than private ones. So my suggestion before choosing where to study is to check if that
school
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 is a good
one
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 or not
and
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, and
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 not to prefer
one
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school
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 to another just because it is a private
one
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. To end
this
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essay
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essay,
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 I would like to
remember
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remind
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 everybody that maybe a more
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disorganised
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school
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 where you do not receive everything you need
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, help
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help
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helps
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younk
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young
 people
to
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apply
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grow up
faster
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faster,
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insted
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instead
 of a private
school
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 where you get whatever you need.

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structure
Plan your essay. Start with a short intro that says you agree, then two body parts with one main idea each, then a short conclusion.
structure
Make a clear point in each paragraph with a topic sentence.
grammar
Use simple, correct grammar. Check sentence form and verb use.
ideas
Give reasons and could add real examples that fit the point.
grammar
Watch spelling and punctuation. use full stops and capital letters well.
content
Your view on the topic is clear.
style
You add personal touch from your life.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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