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The table below shows the number of kilometres passengers travelled on five types of transport in an European country in 1995, 2005, and 2015.

The table below shows the number of kilometres passengers travelled on five types of transport in an European country in 1995, 2005, and 2015.
The provided table illustrates the distance travelled by passengers, measured in
kilometres
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, on five distinct transports in
an
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 European country from 1995 to 2015.
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 the data, a significant rise was observed in air and rail
transport
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,
while
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 bus
transport
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 reported a decline.
In addition
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, bicycle and motorbike
transport
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 showed a fluctuating trend throughout the period shown. As shown in the figure,
initially
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 in 1995, air
transport
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 was used by Europeans to travel for 2. Over the following twenty years,
this
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number
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 increased tenfold.
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, the total
number
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 of distance passengers travelled by rail
also
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 surged minimally, from 38 to 60.
By contrast
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, citizens who travelled by bus witnessed a modest drop
by
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 6 in the first decade and 8 more in the second. Despite experiencing a minor decline, passengers who used bicycles had travelled 2
kilometres
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 by 2015, reverting to their initial
number
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. Interestingly, the total
number
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 of trips taken by motorbikes recorded a fluctuating pattern, from 5 to 3
kilometres
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 and ending in 6
kilometres
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 towards the end of the observed timeframe.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words kilometres, transport, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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