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Write on the following topic. The most important function of music is that it helps people reduce stress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or expirience

People have differing views about
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's most important aim
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 aiding listeners by reducing stress. In my opinion,
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 firmly agree that calming people is the main function of
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 some
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 of
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 tend to
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as well as
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lowering
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listeners
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 moods, they can always switch out the genre for a more calming one.
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, a 2022 study focused on how individuals coped during the COVID-19 pandemic around the world, almost 60
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 of people reported that listening to
music
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 during that stressful time actually helped them get through that tough time by de-stressing the
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listeners
. As a matter of fact, the
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 results clearly showed that the genre of
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 doesn't matter at all. In my
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experience
,
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 was in a very dark headspace during the pandemic, feeling lost and lonely, without
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 being available during that stressful time of my life, and putting my thoughts and feelings into
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 lyrics,
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 wouldn't be the person that
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 am today.
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,
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 firmly believe that
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 has a great
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influence
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 our moods, including lifting our moods up and de-stressing.
Music
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 has helped many
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listeners
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 to not feel so alone, allowing them to be seen and heard.

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task response
Plan first. Say your view in one line. Then add 2 ideas with a small example. End with one clear line.
coherence
Use links to show how ideas fit. Use 'first', 'also', 'but', 'then', 'in addition' in a simple way.
language
Fix spell and form. Keep words small and easy. Read aloud to find errors.
content
Clear view is stated early.
evidence
A real study and a personal story are used as examples.
structure
A short conclusion wraps the idea.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • therapeutic
  • alleviate
  • endorphins
  • holistic
  • well-being
  • cognitive
  • symbiotic
  • universality
  • serotonin
  • multifaceted
  • harmony
  • resonance
  • cathartic
  • emotional release
  • cultural expression
  • social cohesion
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