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Some people prefer to live in hot climate while others love to live in countries with cold weather discuss both views and give your opinion

Nowadays
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Nowadays,
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 a lot of people prefer to live in a hot
climate
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 country
instead
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 of a region with cold weather. To be honest, as I live
Milan
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in Milan
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, which is located in the north of
italy
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Italy
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, and, as I love skiing, I like cold weather, even if sometimes it bothers me, in
fact
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fact,
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 there are periods in which you freeze even if you wear a shirt
a
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, a
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jumper and a jacket. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 to love a cold
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climate
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climate,
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 you need to get used to it
,
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;
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otherwise
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, if you are used to living in a hot
country
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country,
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 you are not gonna make it
trought
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through
 a cold winter. As I have just
said
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said,
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 it's all a matter of being used to it, in fact, as everybody noticed, when you go to the mountain,
while
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 you are freezing, you may see local people wearing only a
sweatcher
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sweater
. As I have just
said
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said,
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 I really like living in a cold
climate
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 country, but, at the same time, I love hot regions, especially in
october
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October
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,
november
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November
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,
march
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March
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 and
april
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April
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because
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, because
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 you can find a really nice
climate
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 which is not too hot,
for
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example
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example,
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 in the south of
italy
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Italy
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even
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, even
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 in
november
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November
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temperatures
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, temperatures
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 can reach 20 degrees. For those
reasons
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reasons,
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 I understand those people who prefer to live in a hot
climate
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 region, and probably if I were born in one of
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this
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these
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 places I would prefer it too. In conclusion, I would like to underline that everybody is different and that it is normal that someone
prefer
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prefers
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 a cold
climate
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,
instead
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, someonelse prefer a hot
climate
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, but
at the end
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 of the
day
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day,
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 we all like both climates
it
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; it
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 is only a matter of getting used to it.

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structure
Plan your essay: start with a short intro that says what you will talk about and your view.
content
In the body, give two ideas and explain why they matter.
language
Check your spelling and make small fixes in grammar. Use simple, clear words and join ideas with and, but, also.
structure
Finish with a short end that restates your view.
idea
You show a clear view that both hot and cold places can be liked.
example
You mention real place (Milan) to show your point.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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