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The graph below shows percentages of types of waste that were recycled in a town between 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows percentages of types of waste that were recycled in a town between 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compares the proportions of four categories of waste :
plastic
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,
cans
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, paper and metal, that were recycled in a town in 2000, 2005 and 2010.
Overall
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, recycling became more common across all materials over the decade, but the scale of growth varied.
Cans
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 and Metal showed the sharpest rises,
whereas
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plastic
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 consistently remained the least recycled item. In 2000, the figures for all items stood between 10
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percent
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per cent
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 and 15
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percent
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per cent
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. Five years later, only moderate progress was observed.
Plastic
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 rose slowly from 10
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percent
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per cent
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 to around 12
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percent
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per cent
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.
Meanwhile
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cans
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 fell slightly.
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, paper went up remarkably to roughly 18
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percent
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per cent
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, and metal shot up suddenly, reaching about 29
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percent
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per cent
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. There were significant changes in 2010. Metal recycling almost tripled compared with its 2000 rate, peaking at 40
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percent
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per cent
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,
showed
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which showed
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 that the most widely recycled category. Paper recycling continued its upward trend and reached 30
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percent
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per cent
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.
Cans
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also
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 experienced rapid growth to approximately 35
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percent
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per cent
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. An increasing trend was seen in
plastic
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:
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however
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, its figure remained the lowest.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words plastic, cans, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Recycling rates
  • Type of waste
  • Decade
  • Increase / Decrease
  • Trends
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Significant change
  • Observation
  • Underlying factors
  • Technological influences
  • Environmental impact
  • Societal influence
  • Waste management policies
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