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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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map
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 depicts the difference
of
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in
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 a
village
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 which is named
Chorleywood
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 from 1868 to 1994.
Overall
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, the original
part
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 of
this
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village
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were
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was
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 in the middle of
whole
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the whole
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map
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, and there were two main roads in
this
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village
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.
Until
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By
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 1994, it
became
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 three to four times bigger and had built three kinds of roads to connect the transportation.
Initially
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,
Chorleywood
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 was a small
village
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 which was built next to the main road
at
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on
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 the left of the
map
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in
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between
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 1868 to 1883.
Then
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, it experienced a gradual extension
during
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from
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 1883 to 1994. The
part
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 which
next
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 to the main place was built
in
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from
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 1883 to 1922, it
cost
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took
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 39 years to build
this
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 whole
part
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,
while
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 the railway was built across
this
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 place and established in 1909.
Therefore
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,
Chorleywood
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 station was located in the middle of
this
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part
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. The grey proportions of
this
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village
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 in
this
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map
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 were built from 1922 to 1970,
cost
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which took
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 48 years to finish
two
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apply
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of
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apply
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them
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apply
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.
Subsequently
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, the sole motorway in the town had been built at the right site of
this
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map
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,
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;
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 at the moment, the ultimate transportation in
Chorleywood
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 was finished. Following that, the
forth
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fourth
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 stage of
fields
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field
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 extension started from 1970 and ended in 1994. These places were mainly built next to the motorway
at
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on
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 the right
site
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side
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 of
this
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village
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words map, village, chorleywood, part with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population growth
  • geographical features
  • 19th century
  • construction
  • public buildings
  • railways
  • infrastructure
  • economic activities
  • housing developments
  • commercial zones
  • environmental concerns
  • deforestation
  • traffic
  • urban sprawl
  • notable architecture
  • landmarks
  • urbanization
  • expansion
  • modernization
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