The parents of your Australian friend Chris have invited you to a surprise birthday party for him/her. Writte a letter to Chris’s parents. In your letter Say why you think Chris will enjoy the surprise party Explain why you won’t be able to attend the party Give details of a plan to see Chris at a different time

Dear Mr and Mrs Darren, I hope you are doing well
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I am writing to you
this
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letter in regards to the invitation I received to
Chris
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's birthday party next month.
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,
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incoming
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upcoming
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birthday will be one of the biggest
memory
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Chris
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will have forever.
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is because he will be turning 18
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is one of his biggest achievements.He had always wanted something big for his 18th birthday.
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, since Maroon 5 is one of the invited guests,he will be very excited.
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is because
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Chris
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loves and listens to his songs
everyday
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every day
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.
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,I will not be able to show up for
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event even though I have been invited.
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is because my mother has been admitted
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the hospital.She was involved in a fatal accident
couple
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a couple
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of days ago. I am her only child and
needs
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to be there for her until she recovers fully. I
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am
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planning to meet up with my dear friend
Chris
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in December.I will be on vacation by
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.My mom will
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be doing very well as the doctor assured us of
speedy
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a speedy
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recovery. Thank you for your understanding.My warmest regards to
Chris
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and Jerry. Yours
Sincelery
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sincerely
Esther

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language
Check small errors in spelling and grammar, like 'Dear Mr. and Mrs. Darren,' and 'Yours sincerely' and fix spaces after commas.
structure
Make the letter clearer by using four nice lines: an intro, why Chris will enjoy the party, why you can't come, and how you will meet later.
planning
Be clear about your plan to meet Chris later. Give a specific time period or date if you can.
structure
Keep one idea per part. Do not put many ideas in one sentence or paragraph.
tone
Use a polite and formal tone when writing to Chris's parents.
content
The letter shows a clear purpose at the start.
planning
It gives a plan to meet later.
tone
Polite closing with thanks.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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