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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where revelant.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where revelant.
The bar chart illustrates the habit of citizens in the USA eating in fast
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restaurants
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 from 2003 to 2013
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it is clear that
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 the percentage of people who consumed fast
food
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restaurants
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 once a week and once or twice a month are the most popular percentages during the given period,
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 every day and never had
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the
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 lowest percentage. Regarding categories have the habit of consuming fast
food
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 in a universal way
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.
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 Americans ate fast
food
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restaurants
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in restaurants
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 once a week, accounting for around 31%, which higher a little with the number of once or twice a month , around 30% in 2003.
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 figure increased significantly to approximately 33% in 2006, before it reduced dramatically to 28% over the next 7 years.
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 there was a slight fluctuation,
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 data still saw a decrease to about 25% in 2006 and increased slowly to 33% in 2013. When it comes to the people who did not eat fast
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 often, in 2003, about 16% individuals ate at fast
food
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restaurants
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 several times a week,
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 there was 13% just ate a few times a year. The two groups above show a trend relatively slightly, with the former reaching approximately 19% in 2006, before falling to 15% in 2013
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 the latter group showed fairly stable at around 14-15% throughout the period.
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, the level of people in the USA who eat in fast
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restaurants
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 has always remained at
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a low
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 level, just staying about the same 3-4% during the decade.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, restaurants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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