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The bar chart shows the number of cars per 1000 people in 5 European countries in 3 years compares with the European average.

The bar chart shows the number of cars per 1000 people in 5 European countries in 3 years compares with the European average.
The bar chart below gives information about how much
cars
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of cars
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 per 1000 people in 5
Europian
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European
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 countries,in three periods like 2005,2009 and 2015 years and compares with
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the Europian
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Europian
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European
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 usual level.
Overal
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Overall
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Linking Words
while
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, while
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 in all
countris
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countries
were changed
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apply
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the
csr
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CSR
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oveners
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owners
,in
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changed,in
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the fouth
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fouth
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fourth
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 and second counties did not have any changes.
To begin
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 with first country
people
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apply
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had around 300+ in 2005,in 2009 it decreased to 400 and in 2015 it again dropped to 300.To continue with
second
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the second
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counry
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country
,it remained the same throughout.In 2005 on
thrird
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third-party
country
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cars
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 were traded among 700+ cars, but by the time it decreased to 590+.The most interesting
scores
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score
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 was in
fourth
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the fourth
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 country no change has occurred.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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