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The graph below shows the percentage of urban/suburban and rural households in a European country that had acces between 1999 and 2004.

The graph below shows the percentage of urban/suburban and rural households in a European country that had acces between 1999 and 2004.
The bar chart compares the proportion of
households
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 with
internet
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access
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 in urban/suburban and rural
areas
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 between 1999 and 2004.
Overall
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,
internet
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access
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 rose steadily in both
areas
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 throughout the period,
although
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 urban
households
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 consistently had higher levels of
access
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. The gap between the two groups remained substantial, but rural
areas
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 showed significant progress. In 1999, about 15% of urban
households
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 had
internet
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access
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 compared with only around 1% in rural
areas
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.
Access
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 in urban
areas
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 increased rapidly to reach approximately 30% in 2000 and 40% in 2001. By 2004, more than half of urban
households
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 (around 55%) were connected. Rural
households
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also
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 experienced growth, though at a slower pace. From just 1% in 1999,
access
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 rose to about 5% in 2000 and 10% in 2001. It
then
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 climbed steadily to around 15% in 2002 and 25% in 2003, reaching about 35% in 2004. In summary,
while
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 urban
households
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 consistently maintained higher rates of
internet
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 penetration, rural
areas
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 showed notable improvement, narrowing the gap slightly by the end of the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, internet, access, areas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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