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Band 4

Many people feel that students should learn from online materials, while others feel that it is better to use printed materials. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In recent times, the issue of
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 from
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online
materials
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has emerged as a matter of significant concern in
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the general
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 public.
While
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 some individuals maintain that printed
materials
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 are better to use. Both views have
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valid
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points
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; I would discuss them before giving my own opinion. On the one hand, students mentioned that it
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is esier
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esier
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easier
 to access
a
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recently
update
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updated
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on
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apply
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the
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apply
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online
materials
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platform
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apply
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. If they could get a new update as soon as
it
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possible
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possible,
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 it would be useful for them
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in terms
 of
study
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. Including
,
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up coming
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upcoming
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 exam, presentation, and project. Because recently sources and
informations
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information
 are
essentail
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essential
 to do
an
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 quality project.
Moreover
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, another
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advantage
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keys
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of using Digital
resource
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resources
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 is that it
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is convinient
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convinient
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convenient
 to carry around. To illustrate, students can work and
study
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where ever
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wherever
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 they want because all of the
matterials
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materials
 are all in their
laptop
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laptops
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,so
,
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 they
dont
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don't
 need to carry six books out of school.
Hence
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, these are useful for
leaners
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learners
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 who prefer to
study
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 outside
thier
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their
 houses.
On the other hand
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, it is equally crucial to consider the argument for being focused. Most
of
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student
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students
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 are losing focus
while
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 using online
materials
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,
because of
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for
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this
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 reason
some
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, some
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 individuals choose to
study
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 with printed material
base
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based
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 on the fact that
tranditional
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traditional
 print media
is giving
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gives
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 better focus and deeper reading.
Additionally
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, it is more friendly to physical health. Normally, people would
got
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get
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 an effect from spending too much time on the screen because of the
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blue light
.
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 example,
felling
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feeling
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 dizzy and eyes dry after
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spending
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 8 hours on
screen
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the screen
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. These
issuse
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issues
 are
most
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the most
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 significant reasons why some
leaners
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learners
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 still
using
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use
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 printed
materials
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 even
online
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though online
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 platforms are
aviliable
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available
. In
conclision
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conclusion
,
while
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 it is true that learning with internet-based
matterial
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material
 can lead to receiving updates on time and
covinient
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conveniently
,
but
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it is
underniable
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undeniable
 that staying
focued
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focused
 and good health are
also
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 fundamental for
study
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. Personally, I believe that
tranditional
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traditional
 printed material brings more benefits to students because it
allow
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allows
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 them to have a quality education
which
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, which
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is
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means understanding the lesson and
stays
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staying
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 healthy.

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task response
Plan your essay before you write. Make a short map: what you say first, next, and last. Keep one idea in each paragraph.
coherence cohesion
Use simple links to show how ideas fit. Use clear topic sentences and end with a closing sentence for each paragraph.
grammar
Fix spelling and grammer. Use short, straight sentences. Check the spellings of key words.
content
The essay tries to show both views and give an opinion.
structure
The writer uses 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' to show two sides.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • retention
  • comprehension
  • distractions
  • interactive
  • multimedia
  • engagement
  • digital eye strain
  • current knowledge
  • outdated materials
  • learning styles
  • benefits
  • challenges
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