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The chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitor to a museum between 1997 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitor to a museum between 1997 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The figure demonstrates the
number
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 of three types of
visitors
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 to a museum
adults
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: adults
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, children under 15 and special
exhabition
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exhibition
visitors
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 over the span of 15
years
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 from 1997 to 2012.
Overall
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, the bar chart shows the
number
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 of people who are interested in
musem incread
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museums increased
 in the first
years
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with
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, with
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the highst
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highst
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highest
 type of
visitors
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 being adults
before
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, before
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 slightly
decreacing
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decreasing
 in the
last
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year
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. On one hand, the
number
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 of adults who visited the
musem
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museum
 in 1997 was 300,100 people and the
umber
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number
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 slightly
increaced
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increased
 in 2002 to 302,200. The
year
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 2007
illustarted
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illustrated
 the highest
number
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 of
visitors
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, but the
nuber
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number
 slightly
decreaced
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decreased
 in 2012 to 380,000.
On the other hand
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, Children under the age of 15
strated eith
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started with
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number
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a number
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120,000
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of 120,000
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 in 1997 and
gradualy
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gradually
 lowered
thought
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through
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 the
years
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 until it reached 82,300
visitors
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 by the
year
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 2012. The
number
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od
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of
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 special
exhibition
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exhibitions
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shoed
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showed
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 a less drastic change throughout the
years
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growing
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, growing
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 from 28,000 to 42,000
visitor
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visitors
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 by the
year
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 2012.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, years, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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