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The internet has dramatically altered ourlives over the past few decades. Although someof these changes have been negative, the overall effect of this technology has been positive. What is your opinion on this?

With the development of computer technology, there have been significant changes in the
internet
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 in recent years.
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 some of the differences were great, others were negative. In general, I believe that the
overall
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 effect brought by the
internet
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 was good in terms of the progress of the availability of higher education and the convenience of business activities. First of all, the
Internet
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 allows students to access
education
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 materials more easily than before. So, more and more people could search and learn what they are interested in remotely.
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, currently, many English learners practice their speaking with online tutors in China.
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, it is a revolutionary advance to change the educational model.
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, the progress of the
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 provides a fast and efficient way of doing business, e-commerce.
This
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 creation decreases the bargaining time between the customer and the merchant, and
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 creates some jobs
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 as delivery or storage renting. All of these
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 stimulate the economy to rise and increase the revenue of both the employer and the employee, which makes the society stable.
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, in my opinion, regardless
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 tiny drawbacks that have been brought, the discovery and the progression of the
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 generally allows people to learn without boundaries
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 it
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 boosts our economic development. In conclusion, the progression of the
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 alters routine lives
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 most of the effects are positive for humans.

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content
Add more on the bad side and how to fix it, so the view is balanced.
structure
Link each idea more to the view with clear steps. Put one idea in each paragraph and end with a small summary.
language
Check how some forms are used. Use short, clear sentences to avoid mistakes.
content
Clear stance that the internet has grown a lot and is mostly good.
language
Use of an example (online tutors in China) to back a point.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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