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Take a look at the graphics and complete the task. The charts provide information about people’s travel in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Take a look at the graphics and complete the task. The charts provide information about people’s travel in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart gives both
,
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The
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distance
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 travellers took in miles over
time
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,
as well as
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,
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 the accumulated
time
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 of
travels
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travel
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on
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over
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 the same period. The second chart shows the distribution of
travels
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travel
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of
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in
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 each year, separately between the
type
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types
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 of transport. Regarding the
distance
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,
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It
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it
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 is clear that the trend starts with a slight increase with a
pick
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peak
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at
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in
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 2005,
then
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 a dip to 2010 and
continuous steep
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continues steeply
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 afterwards. Another noticeable feature was the concordance of both
distance
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 and
time
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 figures. In terms of travel mode, it can be said that utilising public transport
was
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increased (from 9 to 11)
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, so
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so
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as
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does
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did
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 the other private transport (from 62 to 65)
,
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. Conversely
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conversely
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, the reverse was observed for Walking/Cycling (from 28 to 24).
Overall
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, the year 2005 was the turning point in both travel
distance
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 and total
time
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 figures, going from growing to
sudden
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a sudden
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 dip.
On the other hand
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, public and private
transports
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transport
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 proportions saw a slight increase except for walking, which
was
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decreased.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words distance, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dip" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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