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the pie charts below show energy sources used in Australia in 2008 as well as predictions for 2030

the pie charts below show energy sources used in Australia in 2008 as well as predictions for 2030
The two pie charts
illustrates
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 Australia's 2008
energy
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 consumption percentage and its projected 2030
energy
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 consumption amount. In 2008, coal was the main source of
energy
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, but by 2030, oil and gas are expected to replace it.
In addition
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, it is anticipated that renewable
energy
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sources
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 like geothermal, hydro, and wind will become more significant in the future. Coal made up 39
percent
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per cent
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 of
energy
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 consumption in 2008, with oil coming in at just under 30
percent
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per cent
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. At 22.9%, gas constituted a little less.
tiny
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A tiny
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 portion was sourced from other
sources
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, including solar 1.3%, wind 0.3%, hydro 0.2% and
others
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other
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 renewable
3.8
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sources 3.8
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%.
On the other hand
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, it is anticipated that oil will surpass all other
sources
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 in 2030, accounting for 35.5%, with gas remaining in second at 32%.
However
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, coal is predicted to face
drastically
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 drop to 27
percent
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per cent
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.
renewable
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Renewables
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is
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are
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expcted
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expected
 to rise geothermal,
which
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apply
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is new source,
will bring
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bringing
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 up 4.3%, wind will rise to 1.2%, and hydro will rise to 0.7%.
While
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 other
sources
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 ought to
reamain
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remain
 steady at 3.6%, solar is predicted to disappear completely.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, sources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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