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Band 4

Some people think that it is good for spending money on finding life on other planets, while others believe it is a waste and governments should focus on problems on the earth. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

There is no denying the fact that individuals can easily accessible to the other planets.
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 it is a commonly held belief that people should be focused on
this
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finding
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find
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 life
on
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the
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space. There is
also
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 an argument
believe
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that the governments have full responsibility
among
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for
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Earth
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Earth's
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issue
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issues
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.
This
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analyze
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both
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this
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 topic from both points of view
,
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apply
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 and present my opinion. On one hand, life on
the
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Earth
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 has some potential risks, and scientists
starting
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 their studies to find
a
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live
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life
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 on other
planet
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planets
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.
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,
as a result
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,
repeatedly
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earth
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 issues,
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 as an
earth
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 quick and
extremely
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 floods in some countries,
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additionally
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, the feasible of
planets collision
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planet collisions
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.
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, some research and experiments were applied on
Mars
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the Mars
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 planet
, about
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. About
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 fifty years ago, scientists found that there were
a
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similar traits between the
Earth
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 and Mars
,
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therefore
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,
generally
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 humans can transfer to Mars and practice their life in a normal way.
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, some
population
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populations
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 consider that the richer and
developments
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more developed
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 nations have immense responsibility
across
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for
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 the people everywhere.
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, they must be dealing with
this
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 trend in an excellent way.
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, the local governments should
laying
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 hard laws, especially against
the
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violation
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violations
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.
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, the USA government has invested a lot the money to tackle these complications by various
measurements
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, whether, fix the
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Earth
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Earth's
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 problems or interested about find a way to space. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
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 question. On balance,
however
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,
i
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I
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 tend to believe that awareness about incorrect habits can
contributes
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contribute
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 to damage our planet,
such
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 as the forest
fire
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fires
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 and
cars exhausts
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car exhaust
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. .

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structure
State your view clearly in the opening, and keep a single position in the writing.
organization
Use clear topic sentences and link each idea to the central question.
language
Check grammar and spelling, especially verb forms and word order.
examples
Give a real example for the point you make, and explain it briefly.
style
Keep sentences simple and short to avoid run‑on lines.
idea
The essay tries to discuss both sides.
content
There is a basic idea of space and Earth issues.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Space exploration
  • Extraterrestrial life
  • Technological advancements
  • Investment in the future
  • Immediate problems
  • Poverty alleviation
  • Healthcare system
  • Educational resources
  • Fiscal responsibility
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Sustainable investments
  • Funding allocation
  • Interplanetary research
  • Cosmic curiosity
  • Global challenges
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