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Some people think that advertising on TV is usefull for viewers, while other disagree. Discuss both sides and give opinion.

Nowadays, as everybody
know
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,
is
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it is
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 full of
advertisement
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advertisements
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 everywhere. Let's think about
youtube
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YouTube
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, how many times,
while
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 we are watching a
video
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video,
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 there is an advertisement?
or
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Or
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 another example could be the
adversiment
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advertisement
 that appears on television every 20 or 30 minutes. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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advertisments
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advertisements
, especially those which appear on
youtube
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YouTube
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 or on television, are very important for viewers but
also
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 for companies. In
fact
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, if you think about it, how many products are sold thanks to those
kind
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kinds
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 of
advertisements
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? The answer, as you can imagine, is a lot. So, as you can imagine, I'm in favour of
this
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 type of publicity. I
also
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 think that it is much more efficient than
street's
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advertisements
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, because it catches your attention. As we should expect, not everybody agrees with my idea. In
fact
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 is full of people who strongly disagree with
this
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 idea. I think that the main reason is
due to
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 the
fact
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 that
advertisements
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 can disturb you
while
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 you are watching a movie or even
while
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 you are watching a soccer match. To be
honest
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honest,
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this
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 is completely true, but
,
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apply
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 we have to think that, as the world is changing,
this
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 is one of the easiest and most
efficients
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efficient
 and maybe even cheapest
method
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methods
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 to show your products. In conclusion, I would like to say that those are new types of
advertisements
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, but, as you all probably know, in a couple of years we are going to have new forms of
advertisements
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 again and again. In
fact
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, nowadays we are living
a
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in a
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period of transactions which will end only with the development of new forms of artificial intelligence.

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language
Fix many small grammar errors and make sentences end with a full stop. Use simple and correct forms.
content
Add clear examples for each point to show how ads can help or disturb viewers.
coherence
Use more linking words to show how ideas connect and to guide the reader.
structure
End with a short restated view that sums up your answer.
strength
Your view is clear in the opening part.
strength
You give both sides before sharing your own view.
language
The text uses easy words and is easy to read.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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