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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the five categories of
America
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 household annual
income
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 in 2007, 2011, and 2015.
Overall
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, the chart reveals that the $100,000 or more annual
income
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 experienced almost the most over the
period
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,
while
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 the $75,000 to $99,999 witnessed the lowest number of
year
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years
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income
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of income
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 throughout the entire
period
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. In 2007, the $100,000 or more was the highest figure among
the
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apply
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others
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other incomes
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income
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. Afterwards,
its
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it
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 decreased slightly
at
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to
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 around $27
million
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 of households before
soared
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 dramatically, which was approximately $33
million
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dollar
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in 2015. In comparison,
for
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the $75,000 to $99,999
was
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range had
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 the smallest number of incomes
initially
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, just under $15
million
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dollar
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. After that, the figure fell by roughly $14
million
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 in 2011. After four years, the figure rose slightly
for
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by
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 $15
million
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, which was almost unchanged in the entire
period
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. In relation to the
others
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other
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 three categories, there were showed the same patterns
over
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were shown over
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 the
period
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. In 2007, the less than $25,000 and the $25,000 to $49,000 accounted for $25
million
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 and around $26
million
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respectively
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, respectively
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. Following
by
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that, the $25,000 to $49,000 was the highest
income
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 in 2011, which was nearly $30
million
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. Interestingly, the number of the $75,000 to $99,999 annual
income
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 remained steady in these three years, just above $21
million
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dollars
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, period, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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