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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart
illurstrates
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illustrates
 the number of households (in
millions
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) in the US by five different ranges of annual
income
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durning
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during
 2007, 2011 and 2015.
Overall
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, it is
clearly to know
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clear
 that the annual
income
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 between $50,000~$74,999 and the annual
income
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 between $75,000~$99,999 almost show
the
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a
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 similar trend that remain the nearly points during the period.
Firstly
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, the annual
income
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 between $25,000~$49,999 grew from 26
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millions
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million
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 to 29
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millions
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million
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 between 2007 and 2011,
later
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and later
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 dropped to 28
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millions
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million
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 in 2015.
Additionly
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Additionally
, the annual
income
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 of less than $25,000
also
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demostrated
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demonstrated
 the same trend that climbed from
25
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$25 million
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millions
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 to
29
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$29 million
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millions
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,
then
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 slightly came back to
27
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$27 million
 in the end.
On the other hand
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, the annual
income
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 of $100,000 or more
,
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apply
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 showed
the
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a
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 different trend than
other
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the other
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 four types. It lost
from
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apply
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nearly 30
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millions
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million
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 to 27
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millions
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million
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 in the first stage,
then
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 rose back and reached the highest point at 33
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millions
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million
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 in the final.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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