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You have just won two tickets to a concert and want to invite your friend to go with you. In the letter • give details about the concert • describe how you won the tickets • explain why you have chosen your friend to go with you

Dear Raman, I hope
this
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 letter finds you in radiant health and the best of spirits. I want to let you know that I've won two tickets
of
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 a concert, and I would like to share one of the tickets with you. Next Sunday, Diljit Dosanjh's live concert will be held at our Rogers
centre
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Centre
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 in Toronto
city
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. He is not only known for his singing but
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 for acting in our community. The show will start
from
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at
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 6:30 P.M.
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 week, Tim Hortons offered awards through their "Roll Up to Win" promotion, and I bought two cups of coffee from it. Eventually, I won two tickets
of
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 the show. I've decided to attend
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 festival with you, as it's been a long time since we met. So, I think it is the best time to hang out with each other. See you soon. Lovingly, Rupinder Kaur.

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content
The goal is clear. You tell about the win, how you got the tickets, and why you invite your friend. Keep this plan.
grammar
Fix small bridge words and form. Use 'to' not 'of' after tickets. Write 'Rogers Centre' with capital C. Use 'Toronto' not 'Toronto city'.
structure
Add date and place in one line: 'Next Sunday, at Rogers Centre in Toronto, 6:30 PM, Diljit Dosanjh will sing.'
structure
Make a tiny change to flow: group details about the concert, then how you won, then why you invite. Use clear para breaks.
tone
Keep tone warm but simple. Do not use long, fancy phrases. Use plain words.
strength
You state the goal of inviting your friend and make time to hang out.
strength
You name the singer and place, which helps the reader see the invite.
strength
You explain how the tickets were won, showing a fun plan.

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