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Band 4

Some schools are no longer teaching children how to write with a pen. Do you think children should learn handwriting skills?

There are some schools that do not teach children how to write
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with
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hands
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their hands
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 anymore.
According to
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 their perspective,
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 teaching method is convenient, creates less
stressed
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stressful
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 situations for students, takes
lessen
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 time than traditional methods.
However
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, based on my
opinion
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 I strongly disagree with it
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 I assume that schools must teach children handwriting. The main reason is that the change in class can lead students to be immature. There is an experiment that shows writing something in
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reality
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 improves not only children's brain
develop
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development
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 but
also
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 helps
maturing
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mature
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 the hand
muscle
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muscles
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.
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, I believe that educational facilities which
attempts
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attempt
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 to make the younger generation
to
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apply
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type
on
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apply
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online
is
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 stopped.
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, if
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 circumstance is repeated over
times
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, there would be yielded a lot of underdeveloped people around
world
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the world
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.
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, I think the change is not appropriate and
this
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 could not be
the sustainable for
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sustainable for the
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 future.
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, pupils can learn patience and experience achievement by handwriting. As I mentioned before, jotting something down takes
greater
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more
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 time than keyboard.
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Therefore
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Therefore,
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 put the young people in the patient circumstances
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such
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, such
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as
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 jot long scripts can
undertake achievement
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achieve their goals
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 in the end.
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, there is an outstanding value that typing on
keyboard
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a keyboard
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 can not do. Using
this
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 developed method
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 on technology, which means that they are relying on
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. It is a crucial side effect, because when the city is blacked
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out,
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 they can not study or do
stuffs
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 they have to do. In conclusion, for those reasons,
It
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 is
undeniable
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an undeniable
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truths
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 that the educational facilities should
let
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allow
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 pupils to write
in
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with
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hands
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their hands
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.

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development
The answer shows a view but needs more strong reasoning and real examples to back it up.
coherence
Link ideas with clear and simple steps. Use words like First, Next, Also, However, In addition, For example, and In conclusion to guide the reader.
language
Fix grammar and use short, clear sentences. Check verb form and subject in each sentence.
stance
The writer states a clear view on handwriting.
ideas
Some reasons are given to support handwriting.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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