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The bar chart shows the number of cars per 1000 people in 5 European countries in 3 years and compares with the European average.

The bar chart shows the number of cars per 1000 people in 5 European countries in 3 years and compares with the European average.
The given bar chart compares how many
cars
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 were owned per 1000 people in five European nations over three different years, compared with the European average.
Overall
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,
Country
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 1 consistently had the lowest figures,
while
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Country
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 5 recorded the highest throughout the period.
In addition
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,
Country
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 4 remained stable at the same level, and the average of the five Countries showed a gradual increase. In
Country
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 1, the figures were about 300
auto
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autos
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 per
people
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person
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 in 2005 and 2015, but it peaked around 400 in 2010.
By contrast
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, the number of
cras
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crashes
 in
Country
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 4 remained constant at approximately 700 over the decade. The highest values were observed in
Country
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 5, where the figures reached nearly 900
cars
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 per 1000
person
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people
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.
Moreover
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, the other countries reached diverse scores, all of which stayed below 800
cars
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.
In addition
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, the
last
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 bar shows the average number of
cars
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 in the five countries, which gradually increased over the period but still remained below 800.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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