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The bar chart shows the number of cars per 1000 people in 5 European countries in 3 years and compares with the European average.

The bar chart shows the number of cars per 1000 people in 5 European countries in 3 years and compares with the European average.
The bar chart illustrates the number of cars per 1,000
people
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 in five
European
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 countries across three different years, and compares these figures with the
European
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 average.
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, it is evident that
Country
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 Five experienced a significant upward trend over the period,
while
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Country
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 One consistently recorded the lowest
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 of
automobils
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automobiles
 per 1,000
people
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.
In addition
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, the
European
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 average showed a slight increase by the end of the period. In 2005,
Country
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 One had the lowest
figure
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, at around 250 cars per 1,000
people
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.
This
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 number rose steadily to reach 400 by 2009. Regarding
Country
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 two,
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,
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experienced gradual fluctuations
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 before reaching a higher point of approximately 550 in 2009.
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,
Country
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 four remained stable throughout the entire period, maintaining a constant level of 640 automobiles per 1,000
people
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 in 2015. Meanwhile,
Country
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 five showed a relatively modest
figure
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 at the beginning but recorded the highest
figure
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 in all three years, peaking at around 990 cars per 1,000 in 2015. The
European
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 average
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 grew steadily from about 650 in 2005 to approximately 790 in 2015.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 92%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, european, country, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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