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Writing Samples
Band 3

You have just won two tickets to a concert and want to invite your friend to go with you. In the letter • give details about the concert • describe how you won the tickets • explain why you have chosen your friend to go with you

Dear Friend I hope you are doing well. I am
writting
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writing
this
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 in regards to inform you that
i
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I
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 won two
tickets
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of
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to
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 our favourite concert 'COLDPLAY' . I want to invite you
with
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to join
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 me
on
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in
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this
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 historic event so we
both can
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can both
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 enjoy
together
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it together
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 and freshen up those childhood memories. The concert is in Vancouver Downtown on
24th
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the 24th
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 of December
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, that
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that
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which
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 is just before
christmas
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Christmas
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. We can enjoy
this
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 as a
christmas
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Christmas
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 party too. The play theme is red and white , with formal
footwears
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footwear
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,
there are
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and
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 no casuals
allowed
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are allowed
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 . Despite
being
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apply
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these
ticket
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tickets
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were
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being
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 won as a prize but
these
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this
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 means a lot to me because when
i
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I
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 tried to book
seat
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a seat
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 in the
stadium
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stadium,
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 there
were
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was
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 no space left .
Then
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i
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I
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 saw an
adversitment
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advertisement
 where in a lucky draw they are offering a pair of
tickets
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 , same moment
i
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I
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 decided to try my luck and purchased draw
tickets
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.
i
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I
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 bought 5 draw
tickets
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 and luckily
i
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I
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 got
chance
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a chance
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 in one.
However
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,
i
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I
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 have a pair of
ticket
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tickets
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but
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, but
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i
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I
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 can not take any other friend with me as they do not consider music
a
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apply
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a love language. I know
you
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apply
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you are crazy like me for concerts
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, thats
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thats
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that's
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 why
i
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I
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 am inviting you to witness
this
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 historical moment. Please be here on
sunday
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Sunday
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 and we will celebrate
christmas
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Christmas
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 too. Looking forward to
see
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seeing
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 you. Aman

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language
Fix spelling and grammar so the meaning is clear.
structure
Make a clear plan: opening, middle, and end.
vocabulary
Use short and plain sentences to keep form simple.
content
Say more about why you ask this friend to go, in one line.
mechanics
Use proper capital letters and full stops in your notes.
content
You show you are happy and warm when you tell of the show.
content
You give date and place, so the reader gets the fact.
tone
You tell why you want this friend to go because of a love of music.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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