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The line graph below shows the consumption of fast food by Australian teenagers.

The line graph below shows the consumption of fast food by Australian teenagers.
in the beginning iam going to write about australian teenagers and their what fast food
restaurants
Use synonyms
 does they prefer , in the year 1975 people who were interested about hamburgers and pizzas
restaurants
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 were little but fish and chips
restaurants
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 were the highest by a wide margin ,suddenly hamburgers and pizzas
restaurants
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 were starting to grow until the year 1995 , fish and chips
restaurants
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 were going down between the years 1985 and 2000 unfortunately the reason was not mentioned , the graph shows that starting from the year 1985 people were eating less protein as fish and more carbs as pizza

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Linking words: Add linking words.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words restaurants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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