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The chart below shows the transport which young people preferred to use in difference countries.

The chart below shows the transport which young people preferred to use in difference countries.
The bar chart illustrates a comparison
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 the most popular way of transportation among young individuals across 4 regions.
Overall
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, it can be seen that, car is the most preferred method in three countries ( The UK-US-Italy) ,
while
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 the majority of the participants in
Franc
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France
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 chose
Bicycle
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the Bicycle
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.
To begin
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 with, cars were the highest among motorcycles and bicycles in the
Uk
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, US and Italy with numbers of 60, 60 and 73 respectively.
On the other hand
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, Motorcycles and bicycles were
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 between 30 and 10 across these countries ,but still remain
the
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lower compared to cars .
In contrast
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, France was the only country in the diagram that
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 different data. 40 people chose cars
but
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, but
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 nearly 50 chose
bicycle
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bicycles
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making
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, making
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 it the first option . Motorcycles
is
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the the least popular with only 10.

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