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The graph shows the proportion of four different material that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.

The graph shows the proportion of four different material that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.
The line graph
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illustrates
 the percentage of four various
material
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materials
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 which is recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a country. All units are measured in
the
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percentage
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.
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, paper and cards were renewed in the highest amount, followed by glass bottles
,
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however
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, the lowest recycled material was
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PVC.
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, the
recycle
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proccess
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process
 of cans and plastics
were
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was
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 started after
the
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1996.
Firstly
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, the highest amount of paper was recycled
in
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at
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 the start of the period at around 65, which
than
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then
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 stayed
reletively
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relatively
 constant for eight years,
than
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 rose to 80 and after that decreased to 70 again
in
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at
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 the end of the period.
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, glass jars had
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a
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 50 in
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1982,
then
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 decreased to 40 in
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the next
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 eight years
,
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however
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, the trend
was
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changed and finished with
noticeable
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a noticeable
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 60 per cent in 2010.
Lastly
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, the
proccess
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process
 of metal
can
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recycling was started in
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1996, and had
the
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a
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 climbing trend until 2010, and reached around 45
in
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by
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end
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the end
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 of the period.
Furthermore
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, the
proccess
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process
 of plastic recycling was started after four years of cans, and finished at below 10 in
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2010.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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