The line graph below shows the consumption of fast food by Australian teenagers.

The line graph below shows the consumption of fast food by Australian teenagers.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph below shows the consumption of fast food by Australian teenagers.
The line graph provides information about how much fast food is consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. It is presented as the number of
times
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eaten per
year
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on three
kind
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kinds
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of fast foods
;
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:
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pizza
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, fish and chips,
also
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hamburgers
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. Taking everything into account, the teenagers who
likes
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like
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to eat
pizza
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and
hamburgers
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were
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apply
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increased throughout the given period,
while
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the habit of eating fish and chips
were
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apply
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constantly declined, moving from the highest to the lowest among the two dishes by the end of the period.
Pizza
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and
hamburgers
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were
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apply
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started at
the
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a
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similar point, approximately at 15
times
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a
year
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, which
then
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increased rapidly in the next two decades, and reached a point where both had
a
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apply
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plateu
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plateau
between 1995 and
2000
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2000,
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by around 80
times
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per
year
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for
pizza
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and 100 for
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hamburgers
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year
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.
On the other hand
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, teenagers in Australia prefer to
ate
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eat
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fish and
chip
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chips
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in 1975, making it most
favorite
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favourite
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amidst
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among
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pizza
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and
hamburgers
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, recorded 100
times
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a
year
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.
Thus
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,
this
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trend was gradually dropped until the
year
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2000,
by reached
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reaching
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the
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its
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lowest point at just under 40, even though there was a slight increment in
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year
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the year
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1985.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words times, year, pizza, hamburgers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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