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Band 4.5

They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

In today`s fast-paced world, everyone
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to
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that to
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 increase
recycle
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recycling
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government
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 should legal the
reqirement
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requirement
 of
the
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apply
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recycling. In my opinion, the
government
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 has to spread news and
ancourage
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encourage
people
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 to
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saprate
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separate
waste
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 for
recycle
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recycling
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and
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, and
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 the authorities should work on
micro
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a micro
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 level to increase
recyling
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recycling
, as they can provide
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saprate
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separate
bins
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fo
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for
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waste
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, and
then
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apply
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apply laws for that.
To begin
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 with,
people
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 say
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government
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the government
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 should make
a
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apply
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legal rules for recycling
waste
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.
Due to
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this
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,
people
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do have
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have not
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not have
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 enough knowledge for recycling and how to
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saprate
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separate
 their
waste
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 daily for
recycle
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recycling
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, so
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government
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the government
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 may encourage
people
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 to keep
waste
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saprate
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separate
.
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, the council may provide
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saprate
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separate
bins
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 for locals to each
houses
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house
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, after
guidence
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guidance
 they may
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saprate
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separate
 their rubbish for
recycle
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recycling
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, and they can arrange collection of those
bins
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, if
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. If
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 someone
obey
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obeys
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 the
rules
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rules,
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then
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 they may be
procecuted
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prosecuted
 with
fine
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a fine
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.
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, there was
a
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research done by Western Sydney University which says the ministry cannot fine charge for
citizen
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citizens
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, if they do not have
soomth
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some
waste
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recycle
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recycling
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proccess
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process
 and system for collection.
On the other hand
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, the
government
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 want to recycle more rubbish to clean the climate.
As a result
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, increased recycling can reduce the pollution of
environment
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the environment
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, with more clean air
for
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breath
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breathe
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, and make water clean, which is
the
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beneficial for humans from recycling.
Furthermore
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, the authorities should encourage
people
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 with news and
advertisement
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advertisements
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, and show the advantages of recycled
product
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products
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 and together can make
earth
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the earth
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more green
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greener
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 and
healthy
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healthier
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 for living
condition
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conditions
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.
For
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 there was an article in The Times of India which mentioned
renewed
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that renewed
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 products make the environment more sustainable, and
people
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 should be aware
about
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of
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 it and their uses. In conclusion,
people
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 should
encourage
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be encouraged
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 by the authorities
for
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to
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 recycle, and
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saprate
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separate
waste
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 and the
government
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 can provide
bins
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 and collection to promote
recycle
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recycling
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,
then
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 they can fine
charges
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fines
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,
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apply
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 if anyone
obey
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obeys
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 the rules.

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task response
Be clear on your view at the start. Say your main idea in one sentence.
task response
Give one or two strong points and explain them with more detail. Do not add many small points.
coherence
Use a clear topic sentence for each paragraph. Each paragraph should talk about one main idea.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, then, but, so to keep a smooth flow.
language
Check spelling and grammar. Fix common errors like separate and recycle.
lexis
Give real and clear examples. Explain how they show your point.
task response
You show a clear view that laws are not the only way.
coherence
There is some use of linking words to show balance.
purpose
There is an attempt to say why the issue matters.

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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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