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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the resons for this? How can people research this?

It is widely discussed that, in some regions, more residents are into exploring the
history
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 of the building they live in.
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 essay will discuss the cause of
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 situation and provide suggestions that can be helpful
to
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in researching
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research
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for
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it. One important factor contributing to
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the increasing
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 number of dwellers
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research
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on
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their homes’ background is the rapid development of detective novels and movies, which have attracted many
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’s attention. In those movies, more stories
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 with exploring the mystery of an old
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, which
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people
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’s curiosity
of
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about
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 the place they live in.
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, there is a group of
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are sharing
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who share
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 how they discovered the
history
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 of their home on social media, which furtherly attracted
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’s interest.
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, exploring the
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 of houses can not only satisfy
peoples’
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people’s
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 curiosity but
also
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 help them to have a deeper understanding of local culture and
history
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. There are various types of
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 methods
can
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that can
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 help
people
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research
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 easily.
First,
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ask the previous or current owner of the
house
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 about the background of the place and buildings around it.
Then
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, searching the location of your
house
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 online, some
website
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websites
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 might have the records of that building. What’s more, having an interview with
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the neighborhoods
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neighborhoods
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neighbourhoods
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 can
also
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 provide useful information.
In addition
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, reading books in the local library, which might have collections of books about
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history
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the history
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 of local eras, could offer a direct and correct story of the place
people
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 live. In conclusion, it is a good trend that more and more
people
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 are interested in the
history
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 of their
house
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, because they can be more familiar with the local culture and
history
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.
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, the exploration is becoming easier with the help of technology nowadays
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people
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 can use diverse methods to
research
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 easily.

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Add more real details and examples to back each point. This will make your idea stronger.
coherence
Use more linking words to guide the reader from one idea to the next.
language
Check word choice and grammar to avoid wrong forms and keep simple words.
structure
Give a short conclusion that restates the main idea in one line.
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